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On 09/19/2011 04:01 PM, Ayal Baron wrote:
Looking good. I have a problem with the fact that there is no agenda which makes it really hard to understand who the target audience is. Without this I believe we will get less attendees.
Spelling/grammar issues:
"Cisco, IBM, Intel, NetApp, Red Hat, and SUSE invite you to join in launching a fully open virtualization management “oVirt” project."
s/management “oVirt” project./management - the "oVirt" project./ ?
"1stth - 3rd" get rid of redundant "th" and fix "st" placing
s/(source)/(source code)/
s/site, forums/site and forums/
s/November 1th - 3rd/November 1st - 3rd/
s/ Open sourcing it's virtualization/ Open sourcing its virtualization/
I believe I got them all except the last one, could not locate it
Carl.
Have you uploaded the pdf? it doesn't seem to be updated.